[fanfic] That Blasted Red Stone Pt. 2
Jun. 19th, 2004 05:44 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
ickaimpY'all are prats. Don't NEED another fic to work on. Really really really didn't need another one. *sighs* -_-
Dammit. Worse part is that there's nothing concrete. No plot, just stupid random snippets. blargh.
supid rotten cruddy plunnies... *stalks off, muttering*
Warnings for plural Languages.
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In retrospect, Hakuba mused, that was not one of his wiser moves. He made a mental note for the future to avoid the
Kaitou Kid around glowing rocks. Yes, strange unsual glowy things were bad.
Beneath him, the Kid tensed, his head coming up and glancing around. "St-"
::POOF!:: Kid vanished in a cloud of pale pink smoke, Hakuba hitting the rough stone ground as the Kid's body
disappeared.
"Teme!!" He shouted after the escaping theif. "Get back here!!"
Too late, the Kid was well and truely gone. "Kuso." He grumbled, rising to his feet and dusting himself off. The motion
brought the other inhabitants of the room to his attention, a giant suit of armour and a short boy dressed in red and
black. "Gomen nasai." He apolgosied in japanese. "Did you see which way he went?"
Gold eyes looked at him warily as the owner shifted to a fighting crouch. The man in armour looked at him as well, eyes
glowing at him from the depths of the helmet. Not japanese then. He switched over to english. "I apologise for the
interuption."
No regonistion. "Je vous demande pardon." He apologised in french.
He was trying to remember if he knew any polish or russian that might help him with the smaller boy spoke up. "Wo
kommen Sie her?"
It took a moment for his brain to catch up and translate.'Where did you come from?' Hakuba relaxed slightly. "Sprechen
sie Deutsch?"
The boy blinked. "Ja."
They spoke German. Which was good and bad. He knew the langauge, but it had been quite a while since he had used it
on a frequent bases. "Ich heiße Hakuba." He belatedly remembered to switch his name around when introducing himself,
family name second instead of first, like in Japan. "Saguru Hakuba."
They had communication.
***
Okay... now they were making some sort of progress. Ed relaxed marginally. He wasn't about to rule out the idea that
they were dealing with Homoculous, not with the other figure having dissappeared in a cloud of smoke like that, but
Saguru at least didn't quite feel like one. And they'd yet to run into a Homoculous that had blond hair for some reason...
"Edward Elric." He introduced himself, rising out of his fighting crouch. "This is my younger brother, Alphonse."
Al waved from his sprawled postion on the ground, looking much like someone who had just eaten too much and had
passed out. "Nice to meet you." Al said poiltely.
Saguru bowed slighly in repsonse. "The pleasure is mine." Ed resisted the urge to roll his eyes. If Saguru turned out to
be as polite as Al, they were never going to be able to get anywhere, each trying to motion the other to go through a door
first.
"I apolgoise for my speaking." Saguru's forehead wrinkled, clearly searching for the correct words. "I am afraid I'm rusty
with this language."
"Where did you come from?" Ed repeated. There was something odd about the eyes... the golden colour reminded him
of Al's, from when they were children, but the shape of the eye lid was just a bit off.
"Edoka." The word sounded strange, the vowels pronouced differently. "Nippon, known as Japan."
"Japan?" He exchanged looks with Al. Al shook his head marginally. He'd never heard of it either.
"Ano... I've also lived in Britian for a great many years." Saguru continued, clearly reading their expressions. "London, to
be precise."
Ed shook his head again. Saguru's face fell into a thoughtful frown. "Where are we?" He finally asked.
"We're currently in a cave." Al supplied helpfully.
"Thank you, Al." Ed grumbled. "We're..." He trailed off, his brain catching up as he scowered the area, realising his
hands were empty. "The Stone! Where did the stone go!?"
"The Kaitou Kid probably still has it." Saguru sighed, adopting a long-suffering tone. "He was holding it when we..." A
hand waved circles in the air, a silent fumbling for 'tumbling through the portal and crashing into the hard ground.'
"Kitty Kid?" Ed growled. The boy in white who had dissappeared. He was going to hang him from a very tall object then
squish him to death. He lost the stone! How could he have be so stupid?!
"Kaitou." Saguru corrected, backing up a step. "A theif. But if he has it, he'll probably return it to you shortly."
"A thief who returns what he steals?" Alphonse echoed, slowly getting to his feet, swaying a bit. "How interesting. Has he
ever been caught?"
"No." Saguru shrugged. Ed almost spared him a snicker. They had sealed up the walls behind themwhen they entered
the room to prevent anyone from following them or preventing them from getting the stone, so there was a limited number
of places someone could hide in the room.
Like no where. All he could see aside from the fairly smooth was were himself, his brother and the strange Saguru.
There was still that 'poof' thing, a new kind of magic perhaps? Teleportation ablity?
"Then I'm sorry to break his record..." Alphonse opened up his chest cavity and pulled out a startled looking lanky
teenager in white cloathing by the collar, like a magician pulling a rabbit out of his hat. "But I think you should come out
now before my brother gets really mad."
-blargh-
Think we got the german and the french right, but if we didn't please feel free to point it out. ~_~ It'll prolly come up later.
Dammit. Worse part is that there's nothing concrete. No plot, just stupid random snippets. blargh.
supid rotten cruddy plunnies... *stalks off, muttering*
Warnings for plural Languages.
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In retrospect, Hakuba mused, that was not one of his wiser moves. He made a mental note for the future to avoid the
Kaitou Kid around glowing rocks. Yes, strange unsual glowy things were bad.
Beneath him, the Kid tensed, his head coming up and glancing around. "St-"
::POOF!:: Kid vanished in a cloud of pale pink smoke, Hakuba hitting the rough stone ground as the Kid's body
disappeared.
"Teme!!" He shouted after the escaping theif. "Get back here!!"
Too late, the Kid was well and truely gone. "Kuso." He grumbled, rising to his feet and dusting himself off. The motion
brought the other inhabitants of the room to his attention, a giant suit of armour and a short boy dressed in red and
black. "Gomen nasai." He apolgosied in japanese. "Did you see which way he went?"
Gold eyes looked at him warily as the owner shifted to a fighting crouch. The man in armour looked at him as well, eyes
glowing at him from the depths of the helmet. Not japanese then. He switched over to english. "I apologise for the
interuption."
No regonistion. "Je vous demande pardon." He apologised in french.
He was trying to remember if he knew any polish or russian that might help him with the smaller boy spoke up. "Wo
kommen Sie her?"
It took a moment for his brain to catch up and translate.'Where did you come from?' Hakuba relaxed slightly. "Sprechen
sie Deutsch?"
The boy blinked. "Ja."
They spoke German. Which was good and bad. He knew the langauge, but it had been quite a while since he had used it
on a frequent bases. "Ich heiße Hakuba." He belatedly remembered to switch his name around when introducing himself,
family name second instead of first, like in Japan. "Saguru Hakuba."
They had communication.
***
Okay... now they were making some sort of progress. Ed relaxed marginally. He wasn't about to rule out the idea that
they were dealing with Homoculous, not with the other figure having dissappeared in a cloud of smoke like that, but
Saguru at least didn't quite feel like one. And they'd yet to run into a Homoculous that had blond hair for some reason...
"Edward Elric." He introduced himself, rising out of his fighting crouch. "This is my younger brother, Alphonse."
Al waved from his sprawled postion on the ground, looking much like someone who had just eaten too much and had
passed out. "Nice to meet you." Al said poiltely.
Saguru bowed slighly in repsonse. "The pleasure is mine." Ed resisted the urge to roll his eyes. If Saguru turned out to
be as polite as Al, they were never going to be able to get anywhere, each trying to motion the other to go through a door
first.
"I apolgoise for my speaking." Saguru's forehead wrinkled, clearly searching for the correct words. "I am afraid I'm rusty
with this language."
"Where did you come from?" Ed repeated. There was something odd about the eyes... the golden colour reminded him
of Al's, from when they were children, but the shape of the eye lid was just a bit off.
"Edoka." The word sounded strange, the vowels pronouced differently. "Nippon, known as Japan."
"Japan?" He exchanged looks with Al. Al shook his head marginally. He'd never heard of it either.
"Ano... I've also lived in Britian for a great many years." Saguru continued, clearly reading their expressions. "London, to
be precise."
Ed shook his head again. Saguru's face fell into a thoughtful frown. "Where are we?" He finally asked.
"We're currently in a cave." Al supplied helpfully.
"Thank you, Al." Ed grumbled. "We're..." He trailed off, his brain catching up as he scowered the area, realising his
hands were empty. "The Stone! Where did the stone go!?"
"The Kaitou Kid probably still has it." Saguru sighed, adopting a long-suffering tone. "He was holding it when we..." A
hand waved circles in the air, a silent fumbling for 'tumbling through the portal and crashing into the hard ground.'
"Kitty Kid?" Ed growled. The boy in white who had dissappeared. He was going to hang him from a very tall object then
squish him to death. He lost the stone! How could he have be so stupid?!
"Kaitou." Saguru corrected, backing up a step. "A theif. But if he has it, he'll probably return it to you shortly."
"A thief who returns what he steals?" Alphonse echoed, slowly getting to his feet, swaying a bit. "How interesting. Has he
ever been caught?"
"No." Saguru shrugged. Ed almost spared him a snicker. They had sealed up the walls behind themwhen they entered
the room to prevent anyone from following them or preventing them from getting the stone, so there was a limited number
of places someone could hide in the room.
Like no where. All he could see aside from the fairly smooth was were himself, his brother and the strange Saguru.
There was still that 'poof' thing, a new kind of magic perhaps? Teleportation ablity?
"Then I'm sorry to break his record..." Alphonse opened up his chest cavity and pulled out a startled looking lanky
teenager in white cloathing by the collar, like a magician pulling a rabbit out of his hat. "But I think you should come out
now before my brother gets really mad."
-blargh-
Think we got the german and the french right, but if we didn't please feel free to point it out. ~_~ It'll prolly come up later.
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Date: 2004-06-19 08:14 pm (UTC)There are a few typos.
He apolgosied in japanese.
No regonistion
on a frequent bases.
I apolgoise for my speaking.
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Date: 2004-06-19 09:47 pm (UTC)Gomen again! *bows*
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Date: 2004-06-19 10:57 pm (UTC)It's Ekoda, not Edoka. ^^; (Y'know, to this day I'm only sure that it's the name of their school and of a city/town (was mentioned in my subtitles of the Clock Tower ep), but I'm not sure if it's their town. Best bet we have though.)
And Japan = Nihon, I believe. Nippon is a counter for two long, thin objects. Enpitsu nippon (nippon enpitsu? Forgot the order it was supposed to be) would be "two pencils". (Someone more well-versed in the Japanese language can feel free to correct me on this...my brain is a bit rusty tonight.)
Otherwise, I found this uber-amusing, even knowing absolutely nothing about FMA. Mental image of Hakuba's face during the languages was great.
And RE: the prat thing, Icka? We do it JUUUUUUUST for you. ^_^
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Date: 2004-06-19 11:21 pm (UTC)* 'glowing unusual glowy';
* 'truly gone';
* 'apologized in Japanese' - [alternatively 'apologise'... don't remember which one is British, which is US; prolly first is US, 2nd is Brit];
* 'not Japanese then. He switched over to English. "I apologise for the interruption."';
* 'No recognition.';
* 'in French.';
* 'any Polish or Russian';
* 'might help him when the smaller boy [...]';
@ might wanna put a space between 'translate.' and 'Where [...]'
* 'He knew the language [...]'
* 'frequent basis.'
* 'dealing with Homunculi'
* 'having disappeared'
* 'a Homunculus that had blonde'
* 'his sprawled position'
* 'Al said politely.'
* '[...] slightly in response.'
* '"I apologise [...]"'
* 'the vowels pronounced'
* 'lived in Britain'
@ ...what is 'scowered'? Scouted? scoured (http://dictionary.reference.com/search?r=2&q=scoured) would be wrong...
* 'who had disappeared'
* 'A thief'
* 'the walls behind them when they entered'
* 'Like nowhere.'
@ 'fairly smooth'...what? Room? Cave? Wall? and get rid of that extra 'was'.
* 'in white clothing'
[Language corrections]
* Japanese - A-ok! Ignore
* German - As far as I recall my German courses, it's almost dandy~ "Woher kommen Sie".. where'd that 'her' come from? O_o Und, it'll be "Sprechen Sie Deutsch?"
* French - Seeing as I've only been speaking, reading, writing and all around /living/ somewhere French, I can assure you the French there is impeccable. :D Great job!
[Comments]
...EE! That's so amusing! XD; Silly Kid hiding in Al's armour! Hehe! Too bad there's no plot with it.... Make this a....whatever...robin thingy? Get someone else to write the next chapter? ;) This way, Voices won't bother you as much, prolly.
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Date: 2004-06-19 11:23 pm (UTC)And eek... yes, red stone...glowing unusual glowy instead of strange unusual glowy... XD;;;; Go me!
`Just putting my 2 cent in´ ^___^
Date: 2004-06-20 04:24 am (UTC)- And: Icka, nice spelling! I couldn´t do it better myself! ^__^
(Ich bin ein bischen eingerostet... ^__^;)
... That was all!
*smile*
C.C
mwaha!
Date: 2004-06-20 07:08 am (UTC)And I'll be a proud prat if it gets fun stuff like this! ^_^;
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Date: 2004-06-20 12:45 am (UTC)*wicked grin* More please.
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Date: 2004-06-20 01:07 am (UTC)We should form a club if this is what being prats gets us. Wonderful story, and I love Al's amazing re-appearing thief trick at the end. *snickers* Come on Icka... moooooorrreee...
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Date: 2004-06-20 01:09 am (UTC)you german was alright! really good!
Re: Prats-R-Us
Date: 2004-06-20 03:28 pm (UTC)no subject
Date: 2004-06-20 10:45 am (UTC)BTW, my MSN's broken, in case you were wondering (I guess not).
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Date: 2004-06-21 12:24 am (UTC)WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE! WRITE WRITE WRITE!!! WHEEEEEEE!!!!!
This just has *too much potential for ficcy goodness* to be allowed to slide. Thank the gods your mind works this way. **cheers**