Yo! Great to read more of this, even if it was short. On a side note, you should take another look at the second story and do a little editing. You drop into and out of present tense more or less randomly.
...unless there's a more recent version? Don't let tense changes ruin a great story!
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Date: 2005-09-17 12:46 am (UTC)...unless there's a more recent version? Don't let tense changes ruin a great story!