cute! i must say, i am a die-hard tgz fan, but guard dog has certainly become a favorite. and any update from you is always a good thing in my book. ^_~
enjoyed it overall, but may i make one minor suggestion? in this bit:
In the mean time, they had a movie to watch of someone else saving the world. Or at the very least, watch someone else save the people they knew from certain doom.
It was always great fun watching someone else do it for a change.
all the 'someone else's feel redundant. i think it would flow better and better carry your point if you leave the first two simply at 'someone' and leave the last as 'someone else'. the way it is, you make the point of it being their day off and therefore not them saving the world, etc, before the reader even gets to that last sentence, so the parting shot sort of loses it's potency.
anyhow, just my take on it. and don't kill the plunnies- i'm sure they stress you, but ultimately they're a good thing. ^_______^
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enjoyed it overall, but may i make one minor suggestion? in this bit:
In the mean time, they had a movie to watch of someone else saving the world. Or at the very least, watch someone else save the people they knew from certain doom.
It was always great fun watching someone else do it for a change.
all the 'someone else's feel redundant. i think it would flow better and better carry your point if you leave the first two simply at 'someone' and leave the last as 'someone else'. the way it is, you make the point of it being their day off and therefore not them saving the world, etc, before the reader even gets to that last sentence, so the parting shot sort of loses it's potency.
anyhow, just my take on it. and don't kill the plunnies- i'm sure they stress you, but ultimately they're a good thing. ^_______^