ext_108917 ([identity profile] jeva-chan.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] ickaimp 2006-03-10 07:10 pm (UTC)

Saguru grumped behind him, muttering dark things as he stalked through the snow about light.

Put the "about light" part after the "muttering dark things" and it should work better :D

Besides that...damn it, woman! You made me nearly suffocate with laughter! XDDDD I LOVE how Kaito handled Jack. It's just...too perfect. XD "Go sit down on the couch and stare at my sleeping friend." "Stay here in the kitchen and stare at my zombie-like friend." LMAO! XDDDDDD!

This...is just priceless...


Speaking of the laundromat...you should have Kaito and Saguru run into someone in the laundromat. XDDDD Dunno who, but it's a funny thought, ne?

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