http://xxkitsunefirexx.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] xxkitsunefirexx.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] ickaimp 2005-04-16 02:07 am (UTC)

The story is great, I love it. You did change tenses for about three sentences in the middle, and miss a few words in the first half of the story. Nothing major, but the tense thing can be annoying.
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