With a defeated sigh that seemed to drain all the energy, all the anger, out of him, Sasuke sat down on the balcony with a thump, his knees folding under him more than anything graceful.
all the energy, all the anger out of him Thump? Use thud? :D *kills perverted mental images* The last part sounds a bit strange
That was the point the world decided demonstrate
decided to demonstrate
It's like it's draining all the charka outta him or something!"
chakra
There were reasons why he hadn't wanted Naruto to know. Not just because he was protecting the blond or fear that his rival would pity him, oh no.
of
The seal was sucking away his charka.
Chakra
Be Orochimaru servant?
Orochimaru's
And he was tired of dancing to everyone else's tune.
Everybody
Thwart their plans by dieing.
dying
I need to you understand me, this is really important Sasuke."
important, Sasuke
Of course there was a price. There was always a price. He knows that well. An inquiring sound makes it past his throat, almost of his own violation.
Is the tense switching here intentional?
Your name, Uchida Sasuke."
He's called Uchiha ^^;
It was Naruto's amused tones, mixed with something, some ONE else.
someONE
A quick check revealed that Naruto was simply asleep, his charka levels dangerously low.
chakra
Low, because he had taken all of Sasuke's charka, all of the curse's energy, mixed it with his own, added more and fed it back.
no subject
When the hell had Naruto surpass him?
surpassed
With a defeated sigh that seemed to drain all the energy, all the anger, out of him, Sasuke sat down on the balcony with a thump, his knees folding under him more than anything graceful.
all the energy, all the anger out of him
Thump? Use thud? :D *kills perverted mental images*
The last part sounds a bit strange
That was the point the world decided demonstrate
decided to demonstrate
It's like it's draining all the charka outta him or something!"
chakra
There were reasons why he hadn't wanted Naruto to know. Not just because he was protecting the blond or fear that his rival would pity him, oh no.
of
The seal was sucking away his charka.
Chakra
Be Orochimaru servant?
Orochimaru's
And he was tired of dancing to everyone else's tune.
Everybody
Thwart their plans by dieing.
dying
I need to you understand me, this is really important Sasuke."
important, Sasuke
Of course there was a price. There was always a price. He knows that well. An inquiring sound makes it past his throat, almost of his own violation.
Is the tense switching here intentional?
Your name, Uchida Sasuke."
He's called Uchiha ^^;
It was Naruto's amused tones, mixed with something, some ONE else.
someONE
A quick check revealed that Naruto was simply asleep, his charka levels dangerously low.
chakra
Low, because he had taken all of Sasuke's charka, all of the curse's energy, mixed it with his own, added more and fed it back.
chakra ^^;;;;
*dead, stopping here*